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 Post subject: The first poem in Release!!
PostPosted: Tue Oct 04, 2005 6:30 pm 
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A little something to break the ice:

There once was a man from Belfast
With balls that were made out of brass
In stormy weather, they'd clank together
And lightning would shoot out of his ass.

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The rhyme scheme started out strong

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Rise. Life is in motion...

don't it make you smile?
don't it make you smile?
when the sun don't shine? (shine at all)
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Great first entry mate.

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I love at.


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you need another line to make it a proper limerick.

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lemoncoatedafterworld wrote:
you need another line to make it a proper limerick.

He just combined the 3rd & 4th lines as one. It's all there.

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I can teach you guys a lot. I write for a living.

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lemoncoatedafterworld wrote:
you need another line to make it a proper limerick.


Pretentious bitch! How am I supposed to express my creativity in this hostile environment?! I'm out!


:lol:

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Serjical Strike wrote:
lemoncoatedafterworld wrote:
you need another line to make it a proper limerick.


Pretentious bitch! How am I supposed to express my creativity in this hostile environment?! I'm out!


:lol:
whoa...........sorry, other bands flashback

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