okay. I listened to it... please understand what I write now as me trying to help you make what I believe to be a good song out of that. The idea is good, I like it, there just could be some things redone to make this a really decent song. One of them is the singing... you singer just needs to pay more attention to really singing things out, he sometimes sound short on breath and a little flat. Then, think about what you're doing in the song, what helps the song... like, the acoustic guitarish sound in the beginning... how does that contribute to the song? Isn't it just adding an unnecessary layer? Understand me right, I don't want you to take it out of the song, but if you use it, use it more consequently, make something out of it instead of just making the break between the intro and the verse harsher... and try to rework the guitar solo a little bit, just get into it more, play your heart out there, just put all of your soul into your fingers, close your eyes, hang into the music... yeah...
And, try to improve the overall sound quality, there is some point in the song when I thought, "Oh, they discovered stereo recording here"... just try to work on that... and also, where you're playing the arpeggios, try to make that more consequent, the whole part just seems like, "Ok, what can we still add to the song? Ah yeah, a little arpeggio". Whatever you do, use it consequently and consciously.
Okay, with all that said, I think you can make a really cool song out of that tune, it's good, just think about the things I mentioned. Cheers to rock music.
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okay. I listened to it... please understand what I write now as me trying to help you make what I believe to be a good song out of that. The idea is good, I like it, there just could be some things redone to make this a really decent song. One of them is the singing... you singer just needs to pay more attention to really singing things out, he sometimes sound short on breath and a little flat. Then, think about what you're doing in the song, what helps the song... like, the acoustic guitarish sound in the beginning... how does that contribute to the song? Isn't it just adding an unnecessary layer? Understand me right, I don't want you to take it out of the song, but if you use it, use it more consequently, make something out of it instead of just making the break between the intro and the verse harsher... and try to rework the guitar solo a little bit, just get into it more, play your heart out there, just put all of your soul into your fingers, close your eyes, hang into the music... yeah... And, try to improve the overall sound quality, there is some point in the song when I thought, "Oh, they discovered stereo recording here"... just try to work on that... and also, where you're playing the arpeggios, try to make that more consequent, the whole part just seems like, "Ok, what can we still add to the song? Ah yeah, a little arpeggio". Whatever you do, use it consequently and consciously. Okay, with all that said, I think you can make a really cool song out of that tune, it's good, just think about the things I mentioned. Cheers to rock music.
yea im awear of all this we have changed it scince the recoring was done and got rid of the acutic we just dont have a recording of that version
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Yeah, the vocals aren't very clear. They come in waves like he is out of breath.
It's alright, but maybe add some second guitar to change it up a little. The chord progression is a little repetitive.
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