Joined: Sun Oct 17, 2004 10:08 pm Posts: 1467 Location: Sarasota, Florida Gender: Male
The Corner, Turned
She ends up lying to me all over again
Sharing another few minutes of sun down
Looking at me with dreamy eyes
Talking to me and planning the future
But with none of it meaning anything more --
Anything more than a solemn reminder
That she and I are separate and will continue
To live separate lives, in separate homes,
In separate places, talking separately to people,
And forever finding moments where we are separate
If only I could convince her that everything
That is mine could be hers and that I love almost everything about her
And that I adore her
Maybe then, it would all ring true and she could take the chance
And say, "Yes!" for once
Until then, she's in the space where she doesn't get close
Because she think she's hurting people
All the while, she's arguing for nothing
Fighting for nothing, working for nothing,
And doing much about nothing
But I just see better and I wish I could share a sunrise with her
Singing, "You'll suffer the needle chill, you're running to stand...
Still..."
And I could sing it with the straightest face
With "I love you" pouring out from my eyes
Today, tomorrow, forever in my heart
And she may never be mine
And maybe there's another, but it just isn't the same
When you forgive someone who's torn your heart out
And you are still feeling the flame.
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Joined: Sat Sep 03, 2005 2:51 pm Posts: 43 Location: Boston, Ma
"And I could sing it with the straightest face
With "I love you" pouring out from my eyes
Today, tomorrow, forever in my heart
And she may never be mine
And maybe there's another, but it just isn't the same
When you forgive someone who's torn your heart out
And you are still feeling the flame."
i think that part is fantastic...
Overall it's really good. But sometimes rhyming and following a trend makes it sound more poetic and consequently, more beautiful. I dont know..just a thought...good job
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