Joined: Sat Oct 16, 2004 11:09 pm Posts: 24847 Location: this stark raving, sick, sad little world Gender: Male
i'm just going to make one thread for all my stuff so i don't clutter this section.
untitled 01
you know there is something wrong
when everything goes right
here comes another song
that saved my life tonight
i made it through yesterday
i cannot promise the same for tomorrow
can you not see that all
i really wanted was peace?
inside this head; outside this body
where is the moonlight?
where is the repair?
separate me from the past
it is not too late
to try and start again.....
Joined: Sat Oct 16, 2004 11:09 pm Posts: 24847 Location: this stark raving, sick, sad little world Gender: Male
untitled 02
i cannot tell the difference
between the two
because all i see
is one big broken promise
maybe i can make it easy on you
start spreading the word
i am leaving this town
in a matter of days.
hold me between your fingers
like an insignificant grain of sand
brush me to the side
when my use is fulfilled
i have lost my sense
but i still have enough
to make a wish
in the nearest fountain.
i think i need a break
from this city of lights
my star grew too bright
now it is fading again
when the music stops
and you get a look at the clock
you will see the time that passed
is more than you can stand.
Joined: Mon Oct 18, 2004 1:03 am Posts: 24177 Location: Australia
i think that last one was the best i've seen from you yet, jim.
_________________ Oh, the flowers of indulgence and the weeds of yesteryear, Like criminals, they have choked the breath of conscience and good cheer. The sun beat down upon the steps of time to light the way To ease the pain of idleness and the memory of decay.
Joined: Sat Oct 16, 2004 11:38 pm Posts: 2461 Location: Austin
Quote:
i have lost my sense but i still have enough to make a wish in the nearest fountain.
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GrimmaceXX wrote:
PATS 38 GIANTS 10 - However I do see a chance the Pats letting it all hang out and scoring 56 or 63 points. Just realize that you will NEVER see a team like this again in your lifetime.... that is until next year...... 38-0
Joined: Sat Oct 16, 2004 11:09 pm Posts: 24847 Location: this stark raving, sick, sad little world Gender: Male
untitled 03
stop talking
don't even think of it
that's the type of shit
that would make me
curl up inside and die
oh, but i need to stop
and catch my breath
someone tell me when this will end.
it might be better if i hide
for a while behind a smile
i won't (and i shouldn't have to)
explain myself to you
no need for an excessive reaction
and just when i thought
that it would never pass
it starts to feel so good at last...
Joined: Sat Oct 16, 2004 11:09 pm Posts: 24847 Location: this stark raving, sick, sad little world Gender: Male
untitled 04
stop hiding behind your drones
this is not god's will
who's god?
our's, their's, your's
show me what he has done
then i will be a believer.
if we only knew the truth
then maybe all this would make sense
(just for once)
how can we stand by and watch?
the richer getting richer
the poorer getting poorer.
instead of watching the time pass us by
we could do something right for once
this corrosion has made me sick
what have we done?
why did it come to this?
Joined: Sat Oct 16, 2004 11:09 pm Posts: 24847 Location: this stark raving, sick, sad little world Gender: Male
untitled 05
slide back into my arms, babe
let me hold you like you want
(nice and tight)
stop yourself from thinking about tomorrow
i've got everything i need
feels like 23 will be a good year
especially with you by my side.
darling,
i could write you
the most beautiful love poem in the world
but i know it would never
live up to my expectations
and i know now
it's not about what i say
it's about what i don't say
i have made the mistake
of falling too hard in the past
but you're better than them
so it's not something i fear.
it'll be better this time
stay by my side tonight.
Joined: Sat Oct 16, 2004 11:09 pm Posts: 24847 Location: this stark raving, sick, sad little world Gender: Male
untitled 06
woke up this morning
and something was missing
realized that every little thing
happens for a reason
thought about all the time
wasted on nothing.
now i'm lying awake
at three in the morning
got a song stuck in my head
(and i can't help singing)
the rain keeps dancing on the roof
washing it all away
and i'm starting to see clearer
yeah, i'm starting to see clear.
Joined: Sat Oct 16, 2004 11:09 pm Posts: 24847 Location: this stark raving, sick, sad little world Gender: Male
untitled 07
gone away
who know where i have been?
i took all my problems
and wished them all away
somehow i doubt i will be the same
take my time
try to settle back down
i've lived all this time
with the best of me under my sleeve.
what is that you say?
you want to know about my past
darling, it is not even worth the breath
listen when i tell you that
you are my sweet charade
worth all the future heartache
yet sometimes i wish my heart was bullet proof.
woke up this morning and something was missing realized that every little thing happens for a reason thought about all the time wasted on nothing.
now i'm lying awake at three in the morning got a song stuck in my head (and i can't help singing) the rain keeps dancing on the roof washing it all away and i'm starting to see clearer yeah, i'm starting to see clear.
I like the rhythm in this one. Try leaking it to the last four lines to keep the theme through the whole poem - maybe "on the roof rain is dancing" instead of "the rain keeps dancing on the roof," for instance. Good work nonetheless; you've made significant strides.
Joined: Sat Oct 16, 2004 11:09 pm Posts: 24847 Location: this stark raving, sick, sad little world Gender: Male
untitled 08 (rhyming is hard)
i heard the man on the hill say
it is not good to dwell on the past
it can only ruin today
while we wait and see what will be
hoping that the stars align
we'll all go babbling into the sea.
i'm dizzy from the running around
but i'm gonna be myself this time
i know how that might sound
by the time i recognize this moment
it will be long gone
if only i could find a way to hold it.
i won't waste anymore
of the time remaining
in our lives
together
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