i realize that words are only words until put to music but i've never been good at writing music (or even poetry/lyrics) but tell me what you think about these:

Hearsay (working title)

As another day begins the whispers permeate the once still air.
Bright and cheery to your face, the fools wait.
Wait for you to leave so they can let the latest rumor fly.
Too bad they don’t realize the same thing happens, happens to them.

The common thread between all races, creeds, and religions.
These betrayals are the work of human cancers.
Gossip decays ones own well being while on the outside…
You don’t initially feel any change.

But one day, it’ll catch up to you.
One day it’ll all bite you in the ass.
Because the next time you blather about another fool.
The mistake is yours, and it’ll be your last.

Don’t come to me saying you’ve been victimized.
You’re all a fragment of the world’s decomposition.
Just because it’s now you that slept with your best friend’s ex’s cousin.
Go away, you’ve burned your bridges without crossing on ahead.

Cause one day, it’ll catch up to you.
One day it’ll all bite you in the ass.
It’s peculiar you didn’t see it coming.
This mistake is yours, outcast, and it’ll be your last.

It’s funny, I’m so young, yet I’m wiser than most.
High school was a long time ago folks.

© 2006 Charles Truax


CONSTRUCTIVE criticism please. too wordy? too many "big" words? hit single to get my face plastered on mtv?

i cant feel what your saying in the words. you should develop this more but use what your feeling to redo the words.


and mtv sucks now. you dont want the association.

At the moment I feel that it's too much of a diary entry-like rant... can you try to imagine music to it and choose words that could flow with that music?

yeah, after i re-read it a few times i figured it was kinda vague...

and i was kidding about mtv, although if invited to play i'd get up there and bust into satan's bed