Joined: Tue Oct 19, 2004 5:24 am Posts: 37009 Location: In Missouri, they would (will) not let me be Gender: Female
Not my best, but I thought I would share this with you all. It's the last thing I've written, and it stems from what I'm going through personally that really, well, sucks. I've only posted two things in here previously, and I didn't hear any comments on them. I thought I would try again. All of my friends say my lyrics are great, but hey they are friends.
I always have ideas for music, but I'm just not that great on guitar yet. Plus, I haven't had time to play in awhile. Add to that I hate my voice. But maybe this summer I'll get a chance to record some simple stuff.
Yesterday
We are creating our walls
It keeps everyone out or does it keep us in?
Now, you can’t see my face
And it makes it easier to push away
Some of the words I say make me cringe
Two-legged animal…so evolved
Yet I cheat and deal the cards that let me win
I really think I’ve done enough
I just want to lay down
Let dreams wash away my mistakes
Escape…all of it…off the cuff
Find that nice spot back to yesterday
Where we broke a few barriers
Found each other yesterday
Loved each other yesterday
No sharp tongues to stab with yesterday
A blooming summer love yesterday
I hate how I’ve killed yesterday
I hold my breath
I close my eyes
I have a fear of running in ground
I keep back tears
A choking sound
My worst fears weighing on me now
I might come up for air
If I start to care
I could open my eyes
If you didn’t have a cold stare
Maybe the best of me will surface again
Escape…all of it…off the cuff
Find that nice spot back to…
How many miles to go?
Found each other yesterday
Loved each other yesterday
No sharp tongues to stab with yesterday
Just a real appreciation yesterday
Just a true, good thing yesterday
Please, help us find yesterday
_________________ Freedom's just another word for nothin' left to lose Nothin' ain't worth nothin', but it's free
Joined: Sun Oct 17, 2004 10:53 pm Posts: 8066 Location: Las Vegas via Rockford (Roscoe), IL Gender: Female
SmilinSkullRing wrote:
Found each other yesterday Loved each other yesterday No sharp tongues to stab with yesterday A blooming summer love yesterday I hate how I’ve killed yesterday
I hold my breath I close my eyes I have a fear of running in ground I keep back tears A choking sound My worst fears weighing on me now
I might come up for air If I start to care I could open my eyes If you didn’t have a cold stare Maybe the best of me will surface again
I really like this part. I think that you did a good job overall.
_________________ Frank Kevin
At night I drink myself to sleep and pretend I don't care that you're not here with me Cause it's so much easier to handle all my problems if I'm too far out to sea
Joined: Tue Oct 19, 2004 5:24 am Posts: 37009 Location: In Missouri, they would (will) not let me be Gender: Female
TwoAlarmFire wrote:
SmilinSkullRing wrote:
Found each other yesterday Loved each other yesterday No sharp tongues to stab with yesterday A blooming summer love yesterday I hate how I’ve killed yesterday
I hold my breath I close my eyes I have a fear of running in ground I keep back tears A choking sound My worst fears weighing on me now
I might come up for air If I start to care I could open my eyes If you didn’t have a cold stare Maybe the best of me will surface again
I really like this part. I think that you did a good job overall.
Thanks Mel. I was reading over it probably critiquing my work too much as usual, but I did notice I like the line "Maybe the best of me will surface again."
_________________ Freedom's just another word for nothin' left to lose Nothin' ain't worth nothin', but it's free
Joined: Sun Oct 17, 2004 10:53 pm Posts: 8066 Location: Las Vegas via Rockford (Roscoe), IL Gender: Female
That is a great line.
We are our own worst critic. I remember that you posted something in the lyrics thread in OB a while ago. I liked that one too.
_________________ Frank Kevin
At night I drink myself to sleep and pretend I don't care that you're not here with me Cause it's so much easier to handle all my problems if I'm too far out to sea
Joined: Tue Oct 19, 2004 5:24 am Posts: 37009 Location: In Missouri, they would (will) not let me be Gender: Female
Oh, that's right. I did. I forgot about that. Yeah, I didn't mention it was my own writing at first to get a more true reaction I guess. Glad you liked it.
We are definitely our own worst critic sometimes.
_________________ Freedom's just another word for nothin' left to lose Nothin' ain't worth nothin', but it's free
The first verse in particular is very, very good. I liked the idea of hiding your face behind walls, and how that makes it easier to lock people out. It rang true for me. Good job
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