Joined: Wed Oct 05, 2005 2:40 am Posts: 12509 Location: Pittsburgh Gender: Male
Finalizing the list
Of where we're going
You can take me there
With nobody knowing
Come on over
to the other side
and in your heart
I will confide
Late Evenings and
Later Mornings
There's never much time
But, still, we're always soaring
High, High into the clouds
Waving at 'em in the windows
They can't see us
But God still knows
I knew this wouldn't last forever
Me and You, You and me
But after what we've done
I won't be with you for eternity
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Joined: Wed Oct 05, 2005 2:40 am Posts: 12509 Location: Pittsburgh Gender: Male
tryinmorning wrote:
That was good but it was a little sad. I think it would have gone better as
Finalizing the list Of where we're going You can take me there With no one knowing
I just thought it flows better. But that was actually pretty good pete.
yeah...i thought about that change and I thought my way just sounded better to my ears...but thanks for the advice...either works, really
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