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"Put Your Ear To A Shell, It's Constant"
Along the coasts oceans
crash
and smash the shells
across the shore.
Along the coasts oceans
crash
and carry waters with such force.
Along the coasts
the oceans will crash
and wash and clean
and bury errors.
Along the coasts
the oceans do crash
and pull us further
than we've been before.
Along the coasts the oceans
crash
and carry all water
against my force.
And along the coasts
the oceans crash
and crash and crash
leaving nothing more.
We stand on the sidelines
of each other's games.
Publicly cheering
for victory to reign.
But silently hoping
for shortcomings to fall.
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"a sonnet"
In comfortable cages I won't contend,
nor will I conceid my faint whisper. Just
sitting in silence I'll speak if I must,
but won't seek out cause for silence's end.
In corners thoughts will collect like the dust,
but cleaner than dirt with no signs of lust.
Thoughts will just drive on as if with no brakes,
'til they are shattered and then born again.
To the point where it will give me the shakes
and onto my head applies such a strain.
'Til it ends like a dream from which one wakes
to hear on the glass litanies of rain.
Feedback anyone?
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man, i just love the rhythm. it was funny, i got carried away at some points and actually forgot to understand the meaning of the words. like it didn't matter. such a magical, surprising effect. then i got back to find the meanings, to find out they're great too. tks. i wonder what your "good poetry" will look like
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dea wrote:
man, i just love the rhythm. it was funny, i got carried away at some points and actually forgot to understand the meaning of the words. like it didn't matter. such a magical, surprising effect. then i got back to find the meanings, to find out they're great too. tks. i wonder what your "good poetry" will look like
edit: "a sonnet" is my favorite.
Thanks man! I wrote "a sonnet" while I was with this girl in a library when I was at UMass, she had to write a poem for a writing class, and I decided to try it out too. We found this room in the library that was smaller than other rooms. It had 3 walls of bookcases, and the 4th wall was just glass. It reminded us of being in a human zoo on Tralfamadore, a la slaughterhouse five.
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dea wrote:
man, i just love the rhythm. it was funny, i got carried away at some points and actually forgot to understand the meaning of the words. like it didn't matter. such a magical, surprising effect. then i got back to find the meanings, to find out they're great too. tks. i wonder what your "good poetry" will look like
edit: "a sonnet" is my favorite.
the getting carried away and forgetting to understand the words is definitely an effect i was goind for
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cutuphalfdead wrote:
"Put Your Ear To A Shell, It's Constant"
Along the coasts oceans crash and smash the shells across the shore. Along the coasts oceans crash and carry waters with such force.
Along the coasts the oceans will crash and wash and clean and bury errors. Along the coasts the oceans do crash and pull us further than we've been before.
Along the coasts the oceans crash and carry all water against my force. And along the coasts the oceans crash and crash and crash leaving nothing more.
you've been holding out?
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the expression means...look, you can write poetry, but you're holding out. You're not letting on that you can. that 's what I mean. You don't post poems much, except about your ass or whatever.
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