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A poem I wrote a couple of minutes ago to kill some time.
Connections
Rare connections to society and it's inhabitants
Shrinking back to something more natural
I have seen their cities
Heard them speak
Now I seek out trees and sunlight
It's not really finished, think of this as part 1. If inspired I'll complete it and post the rest.
Joined: Tue Oct 19, 2004 10:10 pm Posts: 2154 Location: Rio
Dev wrote:
A poem I wrote a couple of minutes ago to kill some time.
Connections
Rare connections to society and it's inhabitants Shrinking back to something more natural I have seen their cities Heard them speak Now I seek out trees and sunlight
It's not really finished, think of this as part 1. If inspired I'll complete it and post the rest.
i like the start. but i would invert the word order:
"now i seek out sunlight and trees". maybe it adds to the pace. but what do i know?
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