I can dance If I want to
I can dance all night and day
because if I don't dance
The night soliloquy begs
I am the beginning of the end
take me to my london bridge and
TELL ME NO LIEEESSSSSSSS

I am the darkness
that haunts your darkest darkplaces
I will give you sorrow if you tread
in my eye vision
line of sight
missed the bus
I can dance if I want to
fuck those fucks in space
I think like a quiet clever man
perched atop a single stone
forever

enchanted


end scene.


Honestly, just give me some construction feedback? I feel like i've thrown in some dandies.

I will give you sorrow if you tread
in my eye vision
line of sight
missed the bus
I can dance if I want to
fuck those fucks in space
I think like a quiet clever man
perched atop a single stone
forever

enchanted

I like this part.

for constructive feedback, i don't see a connection between the space and the bridge with the other lyrics, but t i really do like the bus. the bus moves and you're dancing. there's a connection in movement. eye vision, line of sight are well connected. I like that too.

i like it. you made me think.

ok, so am I correct in thinking that you like the word dark?
sorry, sorry, but look, when you repeat a word within a line like this, it takes away from the intent of the line- I got too involved with reading the word Dark and lost all interest in what you're saying here.

get a thesaurus or read more fiction, anything to enlarge the number of words you're able to use when you want to convey a thought. It'll help with any lyric writing you do.

Eh...

Because one of my friends constantly sings the Safety Dance, I can't get that beat out of my head when I read this.

I love the second stanza though. I think it's beyond beauty. However, the Safety Dance likeness makes this seem a bit less serious. You get a shift of feeling. I don't know if that was intentional or not. The first stanza you feel more light-hearted than you do when you get to the second stanza where you suddenly feel heavy. In my opinion, it can't be taken as seriously as you probably want it to be unless you cut the Safety Dance likeness. This is all just my opinion, for I have no idea what was intentional or not.

This was intended as a joke lol. Around the time mikey was saying shit. I didn't expect people to actually respond. I just made up shit.

I'm not even sure what a second stanza is lol.

ARGGGH

LOL

You asked for feedback and we took you seriously and gave it. You made me think you bastard, and I hate that!!!!!!!

That's the last time BUDDY. BUSTER.. YOU yeah.... last time.

: P~

No.More.Feedback.For.You. You'll be feedbackless.

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i love the "london bridge" bit.
the image is stunning, like, a bridge, in london (fog)
whoa

It's just lyrics stolen from songs that popped in my head mixed with random words lol. I am surprised people actually got something out of it lol.

I was talking about the earlier ones.