i'll give you a more in depth response later, but you should consider change the title to "Wake Up Twice"

that could totally work as a song. i like it.

i feel i can relate as in i don't know what day it is and my sleep schedule's been awful

this piece starts off really really nicely although its content appears to be a little vague but the ending to it is - in my eyes - very simple and very awesome at the same time. For the poem it comes like a revelation, hard to explain... those last two lines sound very familiar (as in, I can perfectly relate). Is there music to it? Is there supposed to be?

i actually like that a lot better, but i'm not sure i want to give away the ending in the title. i went with "The Dreamer" because by title alone it could be about a lot of different things. looking forward to the in depth response.

i guess it's about the endless cycle of conformity and the awkwardness thereof. the piece was actually about 4x as long originally back in 2004, but over the years i've cut it down to what you just read. it was full of contradictions and redundant lines.


i don't know really, right now there isn't, but i could see it work in a softer Indifference type music environment.

additionally i'd like to add that i don't think it's finished yet. the last lines are the end, but i feel there's something i could, and possibly need to add to the middle parts.

Loved the ening stanza - good stuff Cono.

The second part sounded quite Pumpkinsy to me..i don't know your thoughts on Billy Corgan or his lyrics, but i didn't mean that as an insult =)

Those last few lines are very good.

i cannot find the strength
to wake up twice today

This line strikes a powerful chord with me. You couldn't have worded it any better.

glad you guys like it.