Another song I am working on:

“Authority”

Authority
You really think you have got a hold on me
But you’ve got two hands clutching the wheel of conformity
And I’ll keep pulling away…

Authority
You’ve got your rules in place, but I don’t see how they apply to me
Would it be too much to ask for you to let me be
Cause when you push, I disobey…

It’s hypocrisy
To put me in a cage
And tell me that I am free
To take my rights, to take my will, my dignity
To say what’s right for you is always right for me

Authority
Can’t we both agree to disagree
You say you’ve got a place in line reserved just for me
But I’d rather wander astray…

It’s hypocrisy
To put me in a cage
And tell me that I am free
To take my rights, to take my will, my dignity
To say what’s right for you is always right for me

Yes, it’s insanity
Forced to walk the crowded path ahead of me
I feel chained to ground, trapped by these walls they’ve built for me
But I’ll keep chipping away…

Authority is spelled Authoritaw.

As usual, this is strong. What is it with you anyway? It sounds so easy coming from you. : P

I appreciate that a lot. Thank you. I'm away at school now and I've been using my free time here to write. I feel like it's keeping me sane and allowing me to process how I feel. I get so frustrated with the superficiality that exists among people my age. No one here seems to want to talk, or play music, or enjoy a sunset...they'd rather get insanely drunk and hookup with random people. So until someone decent comes along, it's just me, my guitar, and my journal.

i just want to set cars on fire after reading that... who's with me?

I was going to say something else but I realized how stupid it was.

I think you should just observe, feel and write.

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i hear ya man, by fluke i'm living alone right now... but its really grounding me like nothing else... screw people they'll come to your shows its just you and your passion. that's what its all about

the content feels very similar to society for me

very much so......

I wrote this before I ever heard Society, so I guess it's just coincidence.

i don't know, i hope you take this as constructive criticism, but for me, the imagery you use in these lyrics just seem very tired.....i'd like to see something that uses the theme of "authority" and our struggle against it, but that doesn't involve the use of the ol' cage/chains/walls/hypocrisy imagery.....it's like i've heard this song many times before, and i'm just looking for something a bit more cryptic or less-direct i guess...but that's just me....

i think a good challenge would be to try to write some stuff with that in mind....a conscious effort to not use the played-out imagery of cages and chains.....the sentiment and talent is obviously there, but it would be interesting to tweek it a bit.....i'll try to write some stuff too, and see what comes from it.....

I agree completely. The imagery is well overused. I like the structure and idea of it all, though, so it'd be easy to make it great by just changing those visuals.

This is great constructive criticism. I definitely understand what you are saying and I'm considering taking another look that this one. I have been writing and then posting my lyrics right away without looking into them too critically. I would consider this a rough draft, rather than a finished product, so all of these comments are very helpful.

nice...good to hear.....