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PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 6:07 pm 
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The Demon Inside

There lives a demon inside me.
He rants and he wails and he shrieks and he roars and he howls and he screams -

And then...
He sleeps.
For months
On end.

Words; His Release.

But the words won’t fit.
The words.
Won’t.
FIT.
THE!
WORDS!
WON’T!
FIT!!!

How do I let him, how? how
How do I out, him out how do I let him, let him
Out Out OUT How Out How
How do I let him OUT??

When I can’t find the words?
When I can’t release him?
When I can’t clear space and make sense and be fluid
And release him
How?

How do I exorcise, exercise
My demon?

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 Post subject: Re: New one
PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 6:47 pm 
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Really loved the passion in this one...the frenzied style really gave the piece the right feel. Also, i'm not sure if i should have, but i found humour in it..it made me smile....good stuff =)


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 Post subject: Re: New one
PostPosted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 10:51 am 
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Thanks man, coming from you praise means a lot, cheers! :)

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 Post subject: Re: New one
PostPosted: Tue Mar 25, 2008 6:02 pm 
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i really enjoyed this, and i know how you (or the speaker, if its not you) feel. iceagecoming really nailed it on the head when he said it had a frenzied style... you can tell the person is going crazy. my favorite part is the 'words wont fit' part. thats where the frustration seems to really take hold and shake the person around by their neck.

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