with words and shit, guys!

I put this together over the course of the last few days. I tried writing some lyrics and I thought they turned out pretty good. My buddy down the hall has got some recording equipment in his room and I think I'm going to do this for real sometime this week, so this is more or less just a demo. It's not in the Dr. Mercy thread cause it's hardly a Dr. Mercy song. So. I'd appreciate some feedback. The timing is a tad off in a few places, so keep that in mind.

i have no idea how to post an mp3. so

Oh, and it's called "5 Funerals." For now, anyway, I think I'm gonna change it.

http://www.megaupload.com/?d=XWI2KSRC

woah that's definitely no dr. mercy...
i'd like to hear a remixed version with the vocals boosted so i could hear wtf is going on. i like the vibe of it though. maybe dial back the harmonica a little.

edit:
i probably should have listened to the whole track before posting
anyway i'd definitley leave out all that nonesense at the end or try and incorporate it in the background... you don't need 2 minutes of that at the end, IMHO

Yeah, this is definitely in rough demo stages right now. I recorded the guitar and vocals on the same track which I won't do for the finished version.