We had the best time at your party. The wife and I thank you very much.

where did this go?

I'll also say where did this go.
There were a lot of analogies, perhaps more than I would have liked ending a few stanzas in a row; but oh so far from a distraction.

First stanza: change nothing

Second: ink black another comparison would help; yes I read it aloud, something more here.

Third: content

Fourth:
Hair, equally deceptive
Though typical it seems

Fifth: cut is
I don't like the allusion here, I want more of her from the narrator's POV.

Sixth: I do like that

Seventh: not face, an image of the narrator's face
Left shoulder would be nice for luck, unless you tell me right for some other reason

Eighth: But I did not detail efficiently the lashes. Awkward
Line three has some nice closure.

Ninth: smoke? from...
I want a bit more of the boat, who is your lady for the time being.

Nice job indeed, author.

im glad its back, thanks sir curley

ill give my thoughts later, but for now i really like this

We had the best time at your party. The wife and I thank you very much.

Awesome news! Congratulations...that kind of recognition is always an upper, whatever you feel about the work itself.

We had the best time at your party. The wife and I thank you very much.