coach, i'm really not sure what you're trying to say here i know you're trying to express something important to you, but it's kinda all over the place. i'm sure you can write something really good about pain. is it your pain? psychological pain?

It's all over the place because that's the state of my mind. It is my pain. Not easy to catch in the written word. Psychological pain that translates into physical...sometimes.

yo coach
my interpretation of this was that it was both a combination of both physical and emotional pain. And the thing that stood out to me was the
'pain, pain, please go away' reminded me of 'rain rain, go away, come again another day' rhyme which was (if it was intentional) was very clever because of the cylical nature of pain both physical and mental. Good work dude.

so in spite of the fact that you feel the need to satirize this forum continually, i was wondering, since we are both indulging in the self, if you could criticize my poetry found here. in short, instead of poking fun at the short comings of the poetry in this forum, which you take such pleasure in as we have seen in your GD or other posts referencing this forum, I was hoping you could give analytical feedback to our majorirty, or in the least one or two of my pieces. i am looking forward to your response. thanks.

I want the pain to go away.
Put it in a box for another day.
Pain, pain, please go away.

I'm gonna sleep the pain away.
Sleep it off; just go to the bed and sleep.
Pain is coming fast, but I don't have to act on it; I can just fast.

Don't eat; stay skinny.
Pain is fat; skinny is pleasure.
What is happiness when there's pain?

My friend has pain; he has prostate cancer.
It's a disease you can test for early, but he was too late.
Pain, pain, pain. Think I'll go get some pain.

jcurley really hates you, coach

My favorite part was the part about the pain