the coin slot tray like a dirty collection plate push and hear the quarters fall around 75 cents a wash to get the mustard, grease and the sin out you’re unbalanced, and since tide comes in 50 cent single-load boxes, you can afford to soak awhile in the spotty pews on the oily, shoe streaked tile the machines rinse litanies all over the shirts, garments, the socks spin and you pull out the ruffled clothes, stinking of clean and absolution the dryers roll spin and roll like falling down stairs so the traps catch the fuzz and sinew you could either hang yourself out on clothespins or smash a thumb into a lumpy grape, then bleed a little on your clothes like a grass stain, but the people will say, “hey, you’re gonna lose that nail,”
and then the hurt rolls around an injection of softener to the arm and at 75 cents a wash you hope that all the blood and hope come out


it kind of lost formatting, but fuck it... this has been sitting in the unpublishable file for years.

I think the direction is good but i would be better if ya thinned out some parts. In a way the description is the point of the piece(kinda) but at times its distracting.

A lot of its effective and good though too, ya

i really like it. i got lost in translation at some points but the lack of structure and punctuation just made it faster. it really spins like falling down stairs, i actually got a little dizzy... good work.

my favorite line:

the dryers roll spin and roll like falling down stairs

well well, look what i stumbled upon.....

the lack of punctuation really works well for this piece. it's got an awkward yet very smooth flow to it.

not bad dude... i like the lack of punctuation. took me a couple times to get the flow, but once i did i understood much better.

the way it's actually formatted in the word doc is a lot easier to follow

ps... not my best work