I don't think I've posted this one before.

My Confession

This has never happened before
The way I have hit the floor
Don’t want you thinking it happens often
No use in breaking my feelings down to nothin’
And it would be a mistake when you need a friend
You may need me to be more, so cast your sin
I’m not condescending to your faults
I’ve got mine too, out they sprawl
But who wants the perfection
It’s not real just airbrushed in
Or a ten second sound clip of the best imitation

We stay for the other thinking what to do
Like the train we wait for and miss, life could pass on through
But this feels good like something right if you haven’t surmised it yet
It could pass by like an evening sunset
Wouldn’t hurt us to try it
We know a sunset is a beautiful thing
So why do we miss it after each new day blooms
It will always be there that’s what we assume
So imagine just what this could bring
Whether you read it here or hear me sing
We all lose love whether it’s hatred, laziness, or the constraints of society
If I lose it all I want to know we tried together before the cards fell
You take the first step and it will help
Because I don’t want to fault myself for not trying
Though it may look like that I confess
I confess, I confess
Yes I do, yes I do
I do

This has never happened before
The way I have hit the floor

Any comments? Bad or good? Don't be afraid to say it sucks.

it sucks, but i didn't read it i just had to get over my fear of saying things suck

now that i have read it, i think you got some good ideas out. some reason it comes off as just ideas, and not a poem to me. i'd try and widdle it down the bare minimum. i like the title/end

Thanks. It's not necessarily a poem though but lyrics. It's too bad that any ideas for music are contained in my head fighting to get out in some manner some day.

okay well then if i heard the music that was in your head i feel i could criticize it fully... cause the music may help it get organized

One day...

get a 15 dollar casio keyboard off of craiglist, and do it!

You don't want to hear me sing. Then again that sucks for someone trying to play guitar.

i was an awful singer, worked at it for years playing and singing for an hour or two everyday, now i'm semi decent... now i'm working on ear training, its great when you finally realize you can do it.

I should do that.

yes you should, its better than thinking what if all the time

Very true. I shall start when I'm reunited with my guitar.

I love this couplet.

"It’s not real just airbrushed in
Or a ten second sound clip of the best imitation"

Thanks.