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 Post subject: March 16 Untitled
PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 2:17 am 
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I was going to post this here, but I only posted it at my blog instead.

Here's the post from there.

A few minutes to write this. I don't think it's special or anything, but I feel the need to post it.


Serious as a heart attack
Clichéd and over the edge
Try to be cool revealed as a hack
Rhyme this line and left to dread

Nothing more to write
Empty brain syndrome
A drink to clear it up
Lazy eyelids instead of epiphany
Left to myself and I don’t feel free

My two arms and the best hug
Lonely morning awake at 4 a.m.
Boozed and drugged and nothing to give
Procrastinating even not to live

A drink to clear it up
A drink to clear it up
A love to pick me up
Don’t leave me to me
It will never get done
End of the world
I'll still refuse to move

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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kelly, i love this. it feels like something i'd write (i hope this comes off as a compliment). i especially love the last seven lines.

im glad you posted this :)

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
PostPosted: Mon Mar 24, 2008 4:47 am 
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Thanks. :) And yeah, that does come off as a compliment. I'm glad you like it!

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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Niiiice - it just got better and better with every line. i thought from the first 'drink to clear it up' it was really strong.

You write good :).


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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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A drink to clear it up
A drink to clear it up
A love to pick me up
Don’t leave me to me
It will never get done
End of the world
I'll still refuse to move


to quote social d... this is the 'story of my life'

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
PostPosted: Fri Mar 28, 2008 5:54 pm 
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iceagecoming, thanks for the compliment. :)

And Social D, are awesome, Ryu. :thumbsup:

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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i think i understand this one...this hits close to home
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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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:thumbsup:
Thanks for the comment.

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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this is nice :thumbsup:

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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Hey, thanks. I was just thinking the last verse sounds a little Ryan Adams-ish though not as good. :haha:

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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pfft, this blows ryan adams outta the water. :D

i mean, i havent heard any ryan adams recently. guess im missing out. but for now, i like this way more.

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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in fact, i even wrote that last verse down in my book that i write stuff down in.

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 Post subject: Re: March 16 Untitled
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Play C3 wrote:
in fact, i even wrote that last verse down in my book that i write stuff down in.

:shock: Wow.

Thanks for the comment regarding Adams too. :oops:

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