Something about your eyes
The way they shine
Something about your body
The way it presses against mine
It all feels so right
It all feels a little too good
Sure not going to last
And I have learned
If I got something good it’s gonna end soon

Something about your words
The way they thrill me
Something about your promises
We never get to see
It all was a little too much
Blinded by the rush
And I have learned
If I got something good it’s gonna end soon

It brought me to my knees
And it brought you to your feet
I was going straight and you u-turned
I can’t say I know what you feel, but I sit here and yearn
If there has ever been one thing that I can teach
It’s don’t give your heart to a man with too many words
I allowed him to reach
He buried inside and somehow I didn’t mind
But now you’re gone
I got a big empty hole and nothing to show
I got a big empty hole and you’re a friend in this world
I have so many friends
I need you to be more…

Something about your eyes
The way they shine
Something about your body
The way it presses against mine
It all feels so right
It all feels a little too good
Sure not going to last
And I have learned
If I got something good it’s gonna end soon

And I have so many friends
I need you to be more...


Badabing provides music and vocals
http://www.mediafire.com/?sharekey=ef7e ... ff9adfa398

wow, powerful stuff kelly.

Powerful indeed.

I wonder if I can put some music to this...

Thanks guys. Hopefully it means you like it. Jay, that would be cool! Anything come of that last one you were trying to work on?

I had something going, but got distracted and forgot all about it. I'll make sure I have a tape recorder handy this time.

Sounds good.

yeah. like i said, powerful stuff.
obviously it's something that's had a profound effect on you. its good that you can express yourself this way.. it takes some guts to share personal works with people.

I hate that usually I'm stuck with expressing relationships. :/ Thanks for the comments.

I would have liked to see more rhyming.

Sometimes I'll rhyme through the whole thing, but I've learned that doesn't need to be done. But thanks for the comments.

im glad you didnt force too much rhyming on this one. it doesnt need it. it feels more sincere this way.

the recurring lines were my favorite, but they already were before i reached the point where they came up again. so the fact that they did appear again was like revisiting a pre-existing comfort zone. then again, this poem is about the discomfort that comes with missing someone (or prematurely missing someone, or being afraid to commit because youre afraid of another heartbreak). basically, the lyrics were powerful the first time, and they are just as powerful (or even more so) the second time around.

talking about these, by the way...


keep it up, kelly

Thanks Ryu. What you said means a lot. Glad you like it.

upon revisting, i really feel a straining sort of desperation here..



the 'i have so many friends' is what does it. ive been studying all day, so i cant articulate what i mean now but because of this line, the line that follows seems to present that desperation i mentioned. to related it to something we both know...



though in a different context.

edit: i just read my post and it sounds ambiguous as to whether i mean this suff in a positive way (which i do )

Thanks a bunch. Really good reading into that. And comparing to PJ. Nice. It's a desperate clinging to something that is no more, but which one (oh hell, me) wants to be like it was before.

With permission I used some of these lyrics for a song....it's came out just ok...the mix sucks but it was fun:

Hear it here:

Track #4

Lyrics used:

Something about your eyes
The way they shine
Something about your body
The way it presses again mine
It all feels so right
It all feels a little too good
Sure not going to last
And I have learned
If I got something good it’s gonna end soon

I got a big empty hole and nothing to show
I got a big empty hole and you’re a friend in this world
I have so many friends
I need you to be more…

I kinda like it. A little more work and I think you and I make a great team. I like the atmospheric sound.

Listening to it I def went overboard with the effects. On my 8 track with headphones it sounded great but somewhere during the conversion off the 8 track to mp3 it kinda all jumbled together. I don't normally use so many effects but I was screwing around with a bunch of pre sets and stuff....I don't think I consider the song a success but it was a fun process. Your lyrics are def the best part...

Yeah, I was going to say that. I like the atmosphere of the song, but the effects went a little overboard. Especially so, where your voice seems drowned out.

And my lyrics are the best part? Thanks.

i like the song... its so cool to have just been fawning over these words last week, and now theyre a song. definitely not how i would have imagined it, but i like it. the first thing im reminded of is the album loveless by my bloody valentine, mainly because the atmosphere takes front and center while the singing seems like its coming from far away. i'd definitely like to hear more out of both of you.