I can't put music to lyrics to save my ass, so here are my sad attempts at "song-writing"....songs WITHOUT music. idiot cat....
"SPONGE"
Tang of iron in my mouth
Taste my heart, spit it out
The salt stings and burns my lips
My survival at your fingertips
(c) Does this make you feel better?
Does this help you with your pain?
Your frustration, your anger....
Your feelings pound down on me like rain
My eyes closed and purpled
Minutes stretch to hours
Does a child contemplate beauty
As he crushes a flower?
(c)
This is a downward spiral
You're dragging me along
Your vortex is drowning me
The little things i did wrong
(c)
Does this make you feel BETTER??
"ROVER"
(c) I'm your dog
Take it all out on me
I'm your dog
Take it all out on me
Because i can't talk back
I try to heal the hurts of a weary day
You just push me away
(c)
I try to ease your pain
the only way i know how
But you're shutting me out again
(c)
So hit me
Bully me
Ignore me
Insult me
Abuse me
Hurt me
Because I'm your dog
And i can't talk back
"DEMONS"
This feels good
It feels right
The way you're touching me tonight
But when we're skin-on-skin i know
i'm only doing wrong and hurting you again
(c) Am i using you?
Abusing you?
Telling you what you want to hear?
Getting from you all i can
Because i can't find another man
Who'll treat me like you do...
I'm so in lust with you
I'm everything to you
Soulmate, best friend, lover too
I've become a succubus
Disregarding all you feel
to satisfy my demons of lust
(c)
Stop me now
Before i hurt you again
Escape from me while you can
Before i drag you down to me again....
They're well metred, so it should be fairly easy to get music behind them, which is half the struggle- when lyrics don't match up with music it's usually because they were written first, but this should fit just fine.
One thing I will say is that the imagery isn't exactly fresh- that's not against you, I usually tell it to everyone whose lyrics i read. You've a solid basis, and if you're 100% sure that's what you want to say in your song you'll sing it with enough conviction to carry it, if you can think of a slightly different way to express some of your ideas it might make it stand out more, maybe not. Either way; don't listen to too much criticism, just make sure you believe what you're singing.
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